An Order Undetermined (6SS)

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Hello, Hagar here–sitting in for Cale during her leave. 

Her optional to-do list included writing for challenges/prompts, and the asterisk by “Six Sentence Stories” indicated a high priority.  I’ve sent up a prayer, and will try my best. 

The host is Denise, talented writer and much-loved friend to bloggers.  6SS instructions can be found by clicking her link above.  Her prompt this week is ORDER.

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The Order Rene would have chosen was a cloistered one.

Entering the convent’s office she saw a latticed grate separating visitors from the nun at the desk; it was both intimidating and comforting.

Rene desperately longed to leave the World which demanded so much, and returned a mere pittance of compassion.

She was young, and aware that those who thought they knew her were making less than heartfelt efforts to deter her (she wasn’t blind: they’d gladly be rid of her–locked up in a convent was preferable to their prideful self-regard, than hiding her in a mental institution).

The unsmiling nun eyed her for lengthy moments before saying, “you’ll no longer wear all that make-up, you know–there’s no place for such vanity in the service of the Lord–only submission to the rules of the Carmelite Order, and hushed humility at all times.”

After earnest soul-searching Rene withdrew her request to become a novitiate–and it had nothing to do with make-up; the risk of failing amid this pious community weighed heavily–if she disappointed them, and God, she’d have nothing left; perhaps in His mercy He’d find some small mission to occupy her, lest she crash and burn utterly.

Hagar

 

20 thoughts on “An Order Undetermined (6SS)”

  3. That was a good six.

    Reminds me of a quite older time I used to be fascinated with and read a lot about…

    It was actually quite normal to become a nun or join them if someone wanted to get rid of you or if you yourself wanted to disappear.

    Mental institutions always had that, weird stigma around them.

    I wonder though where will Rene go now.

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  7. I believe Rene made the correct choice for not necessarily (totally) the right reason. Perhaps her challenge is to learn to live in and navigate the world she so desperately wants to leave behind. Perhaps one day, she’ll have the hindsight to understand that.

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